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The two figures below show the rate of criminal convictions among men and women of different ages in the UK and the proportion of male and female prison inmates in the British prison system. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two pages show the data of
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the percentage
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 of all convictions among two
gender
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 of different people ages and
gender
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 of
prison
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 inmates in the UK. Overall, the
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 of convictions are the highest
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 of male which rise rapidly to 16
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 about 20
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. Another interesting point is
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gender
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 of
prison
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 female stand in the lowest
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. Looking at the details, men who make criminal convictions grow rate unpredictably all
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age
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 of
offender
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the offender
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. The
age
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 of 10
show
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 the lowest
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 which is 2
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 and the other
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 of 60 is the same
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Female
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 grow steadily in all
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age
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ages
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 from 10 to 60.
On the other hand
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prison
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male
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 dominate among
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inmates which are 96
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.
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, the
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 of
prison
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 female are considerably less
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 male which show the
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 is 4.

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