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The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.

The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.
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The given bar chart presents the proportion of males and
females
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 in the UK consuming portions of fruits and vegetables per day by age group in 2006.
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, it can be seen that women consumed
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 total of portions of fruits and vegetables more than men.
According to
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 the data, the figure of women, who were 19-64 years old, steadily increased as the age group increased.
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, younger
females
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 tended to have portions of the food groups lower than old ones. The
females
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 of
ages
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 55-64 had the highest consumption of fruits and vegetables at nearly 35%,
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 the lowest belonged to the
females
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 of
ages
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 19-24, around 15%.
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, There was
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 in
percentage
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the percentage
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 of age groups of men. Men of
ages
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 55-64 consumed the highest at around 30-35%,
as
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the same figure as women. Interestingly, the proportion of both genders of
ages
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 75
were
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 nearly, at around 25%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words females, ages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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