The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison
Pie
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The pie
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chart
show
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shows
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ratio
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the ratio
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of
british
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British
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students
at one
untiversity
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university
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who were
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were
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was
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able to speak different languages from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
,
students
have improved their
language
skill
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skills
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from only speaking to
english
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English
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. Pupils have
shows
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shown
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interest study in
spanish
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Spanish
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and
another languages
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another language
other languages
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while
reduced interest in
frensh
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french
fresh
. In 2000, there were 20
percent
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per cent
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students
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of students
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were not
studing
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studying
other
lanugage
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languages
that has
been
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apply
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improved st 10
percent
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per cent
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in 2010.
Same
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The same
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reverse improvement has
found
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been found
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in
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the sapnish
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sapnish
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Spanish
language
that
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which
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reached
at
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apply
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35 from 30.
On the other hand
, 5% more
students
has
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have
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contributed
in
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to
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studing
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studying
one another
laguage
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language
in 2010 compared to 2000 respectively 15 to 20. There is no
differance
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difference
found in
studing
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studying
two other
language
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languages
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and
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the german
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german
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German
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language
, both were quite stuck at 10% without changes.
Furthermore
,
student
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the student
a student
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has
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apply
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show
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shown
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less interest in
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the french
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french
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French
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language
as it
droped
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dropped
down
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apply
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to 10% in 2010 from 15% in 2000.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • converse
  • additional languages
  • language proficiency
  • monolingual
  • multilingualism
  • proficient
  • trend
  • significant changes
  • decade
  • notable increase
  • commonly spoken
  • comparison
  • data reveal
  • observed
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