The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006. You should write at least 150 words.
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The chart shows information regarding the proportion of men and women, from
UK
and of varying Correct article usage
the UK
age
group
, who Fix the agreement mistake
groups
eat
five portions of fruits and vegetables in 2006. Wrong verb form
ate
This
is in accordance with Correct article usage
the world
world health organization's
recommendation.
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World Health Organization's
Overall
, females
have higher
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a higher
percentage
of consumption than males
regardless of age
. In addition
, both genders who belonged in
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to
age
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the age
group
55-64 had the highest percentage
while
the youngest age
group
had the least.
It can be seen among females
that as age
goes higher, there was an increase in consumption until the age
of 55-64 reaching a little over a third (34%), which is as
twice as the Rephrase
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females
aged 19 to 24. However
, older adults aged 65-74 and 75 had lower percentage
with 29% and 25% respectively. Fix the agreement mistake
percentages
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trend can Add an article
A similar
also
be noticed with its male counterpart. Starting from 15% for 19-24 year olds increased to 23% for 35-44 which is
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remained the same for ages 45 to 54. At Correct article usage
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age
55 to 64, males
peaked at around around 32%. There was a decline in percentage
as males
reached age
65-74 and 75 with a figure of around 26% and 25%, respectively.
Throughout the age
groups, females
had Add an article
a consistent
consistent
higher Change the word
consistently
percentage
than males
. Although
, a small difference Correct word choice
However
among
the youngest Change preposition
between
age
group
with just approximately 2%, and same
figure with the oldest Correct article usage
the same
age
group
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