This line graph depicts information about how many books were read, in Burnaby public library by male and female, for four years. Overall, the ratio of men rose dramatically throughout the period, whereas the women gradually decrease at the end. According to what is shown, in 2011, women were read more than men between 5000 and 3000 book. Then, in both two years read books were increased by boys and girls. Moreover, the percentage of reading book men grow up quickly until the end However, the women were gradual growth from 2012. In both genders were same number which is 10000 books in 2013. Additionally, the first drop for females started from 2013 to 2014, it went down to 7000. In conclusion, in fact the men overcome women by the number of reading book at Burnaby public library. If females hadn’t fall at the end, they haven’t lost.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for This line graph depicts information about how many books were read, in Burnaby public library by male and female, for four years. Overall, the ratio of men rose dramatically throughout the period, whereas the women gradually decrease at the end. According to what is shown, in 2011, women were read more than men between 5000 and 3000 book. Then, in both two years read books were increased by boys and girls. Moreover, the percentage of reading book men grow up quickly until the end However, the women were gradual growth from 2012. In both genders were same number which is 10000 books in 2013. Additionally, the first drop for females started from 2013 to 2014, it went down to 7000. In conclusion, in fact the men overcome women by the number of reading book at Burnaby public library. If females hadn’t fall at the end, they haven’t lost.
line graph depicts information about how many books were read, in Burnaby public library by
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, for four years.
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quickly until the end
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from 2012.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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