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most employers do job interview before offering a position to a person. do you think this is the best way to do it, or are there better alternatives? what is the best method of choosing employees in your opinion?

#employers #job #interview #position #person #alternatives #method #employees
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To select
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 the best
canditates
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candidates
 out of all applicants is often a difficult
job
 when you have little understanding of that person. Most often,
human
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 resources manager will initiate an
interview
 with the potential candidates before selecting the best out of all.
However
, I consider
this
 insufficient to make an informed decision. Conducting
interview
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 does provide some benefits
on
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 getting to know the person better through observing their communication skills and understanding more of their thoughts.
In particular
, being competent in communication is essential in every
aspects
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 of work,
such
 as task collaboration, explaining
yours
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 ideas,
personal
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 manners. Through
interview
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interviews
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, the interviewer may be able to examine
this
 important ability closely.
Nonetheless
,
interview
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an interview
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 alone is not all-rounded enough to examine all the
skillset
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skills
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 required for the
job
. I believe conducting daily
job
simulation
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simulations
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 could
further
 ensure the selected candidate's
capacbility
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capacity
 to discharge his daily tasks on top of
interview
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.
For example
, some well-known firms like MTR company
selects
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select
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 their management trainees through presentation test and
asking
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 them to solve
real life
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 problems. By doing so, they could select the top performers out of all
paticipants
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participants
 targeting the
job
 responsibilities. In conclusion, we shall not rely solely on
interview
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 alone to reach our final decision, simulation exam of
job
 tasks is
also
 crucial
which
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provide
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 us greater assurance on the competencies of the candidate.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure there is a clear introduction, detailed body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and follow logically from the previous one.
task achievement
Provide a more detailed analysis of alternative methods for choosing employees, comparing them directly to the traditional interview process to enhance the depth of your argument and show a more nuanced understanding of the topic.
supported main points
To improve your score, make sure that every main point is expanded with sufficient detail and supported by relevant, specific examples. Each paragraph should contain one clear main point.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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