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The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.

The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.
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The bar graph illustrates, the proportions of male and female intake of a fifth or greater part of fruits and
vegetables
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 per day by a different age category in The United Kingdom in 2006, as recommended by the World Health Organization.
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, the given bar graph shows the 55-64 old
males
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 and girls consumed more fruits and
vegetables
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 as compared to the lowest consumed by the youngest on a daily basis. It is conspicuous that, in the age group of 55 to 64 women consumed about 35% compared to
males
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 32%. Which was highest among all age groups.
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, 65-75 years old were the second highest females nearly 30%,
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 27% of
males
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 consumed natural food.
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, 45-54 females were again dominating over
males
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, which was 27% to 22% boys respectively. Probing ahead, seniors of 75 years male and females remained constant at 25%.
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, 35-44 old girls were 25%,
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males
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 were nearly 22% ate fruits and
vegetables
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.
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, 25-34% of humans were consumed, mother 22% and 20% of
males
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 respectively.
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, the lowest consumers of fruit and
vegetables
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 were 19-24 years old, guys were standing at 15%
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 mothers were slightly at 17%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words vegetables, males with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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