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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The presented bar demonstrates the proportion of the total world individuals in 4 countries from the period 1950 to 2002, and forecasting for 2050.
Overall
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,
while
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China
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 dominated
initially
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 the population,
India
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 took the lead in the end.
Japan
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 during the period hit the lowest point. In 1950, The capacity in
China
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 reached the highest point of individuals by 23%.
India
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 came in second place by 15%.
This
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 percentage halved in the USA.
Japan
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 came in the
last
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 place by less than 4%. After 52 years,
China
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 stood at the highest point by 20% . The growth rate in
India
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 rose to 17%.
However
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, the USA quantity dipped to 5%. The number in
Japan
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 decreased slightly. In 2050,
India
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 will emerge with the highest number of citizens by 19%. The ratio in
China
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 will fall gradually. In the USA, the percentage of people will remain unchanged,
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, in
Japan
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 will be less than 2%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, india, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • total world population
  • projections
  • analyze
  • significant changes
  • highlight
  • expected trends
  • employment percentages
  • identify
  • notable differences
  • summarize
  • overarching trends
  • observations
  • data represented
  • bar chart
  • increase
  • decrease
  • proportion
  • comparison
  • employment rate
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