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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

ou and your family are planning to spend a weekend at a seaside hotel. Write a letter to the hotel, making the arrangements. In your letter tell them when you will be arriving and leaving explain what type of rooms you would like, and ask how much the weekend will cost ask about activities and places of interest near the hotel You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to request to make
necessary
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the necessary

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 arrangements for our stay. We planned a
week
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week's

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 trip to explore the
Coastalside
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Coastal side

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of Arugambay. We will be
laving
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leaving

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 our place around 9.00 am and expect to check in to your place by 1.00pm
same
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the same

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 day for 7
days
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7-day

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stay and will check out
the
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of the

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 premises at 5.00pm on
following
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the following

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 Sunday. Altogether we are 05
people
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five-person

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 group including me, my wife and 03 kids so I would like to book a family room with meals and
attached
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an attached

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 bathroom facility as my kids always use
bathroom
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the bathroom

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 at night. I prefer to have the room
in
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on

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ground
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the ground

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 floor which will help me to manage my kids conveniently. Please share
me
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apply

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the
detail
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detailed

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 charge sheet for
weekend
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the weekend

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 stay to work on my budget.
In addition
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 to
above
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the above

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, I would really be grateful if you could advise me
the
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on the

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 places to explore near
by
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apply

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your location except adventure places that will not be suitable for a family. I would recommend around 15Kms vicinity if fine for me. You can contact me via email or mobile no I already provided. I am looking forward to
here
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hear

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 from you. Yours faithfully Aravinda Jayaweera

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coherence cohesion
To improve the logical structure, consider reorganizing the letter to make it clearer and more concise. Breaking it into smaller paragraphs with single ideas will help.
task achievement
Ensure to proofread the letter for minor grammatical errors and typos. Phrases like 'leaving' and 'hearing' should be corrected.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are both appropriate and polite, making the overall tone suitable for a formal letter.
complete response
The letter addresses all parts of the task, including arrival and departure details, room preferences, cost inquiries, and questions about nearby activities.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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