The line graphs below show the production of and demand for steel in million tonnes and the number of workers employed in the steel industry in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs below show the production of and demand for steel in million tonnes and the number of workers employed in the steel industry in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs above contrast the production of and demand for
steel
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in
million
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tonnes
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in Britain in 2010, and they
also
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provide the
number
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of employees in the
steel
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industry.
According to
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the first graph, both the production of and demand for
steel
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constantly decreased in slight fluctuation. As to the
number
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of workers, the graph presents a more dramatic declining trend. From January to September, the production was basically steady, ranging between 5000
million
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tonnes
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in February and about 3000
million
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tonnes
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in August.
Then
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there was a small increase followed by a significant drop, decreasing from 5000
million
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tonnes
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in September to hardly 1000
million
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tonnes
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in December. The demand for
steel
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shows a similar trend, with nine months' relative stability and a sudden drop
at the end
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of 2010. As for the
number
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of employees, the trend is more clear. During the first period, the
number
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dropped rapidly from approximately 5500 in February to 3000 in March, and
this
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number
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remained for five months.
Subsequently
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, the
number
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further
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decreased to merely 1000
at the end
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of
this
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year.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words steel, million, tonnes, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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