You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graphs below show the production of and demand for steel in million tonnes and the number of workers employed in the steel industry in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The line graphs below show the production of and demand for steel in million tonnes and the number of workers employed in the steel industry in the UK in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The line graphs above contrast the production of and demand for
steel
in
million
tonnes
in Britain in 2010, and they
also
provide the
number
of employees in the
steel
industry.
According to
the first graph, both the production of and demand for
steel
constantly decreased in slight fluctuation. As to the
number
of workers, the graph presents a more dramatic declining trend. From January to September, the production was basically steady, ranging between 5000
million
tonnes
in February and about 3000
million
tonnes
in August.
Then
there was a small increase followed by a significant drop, decreasing from 5000
million
tonnes
in September to hardly 1000
million
tonnes
in December. The demand for
steel
shows a similar trend, with nine months' relative stability and a sudden drop
at the end
of 2010. As for the
number
of employees, the trend is more clear. During the first period, the
number
dropped rapidly from approximately 5500 in February to 3000 in March, and
this
number
remained for five months.
Subsequently
, the
number
further
decreased to merely 1000
at the end
of
this
year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words steel, million, tonnes, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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