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The pie charts depict online sales for Canadian retailers in 2005 and 2010. Overall, electronic appliances and food were the most commonly purchased items online during both years. In 2005, electronic appliances were the top-selling product, accounting for 35 percent of online sales, followed by home furnishings at 22%. Food and beverages represented 22% of the total online market, whilst video games made up the smallest share at 18 percent. However, the trend shifted by 2010. Although electronic goods still made up a significant portion of sales at 30%, they were no longer the top-selling category. Food and beverages took the lead, comprising a percentage of 32% of total sales. Video games moved into third place, accounting for 23% of online purchases, while home furnishings dropped to the lowest position, representing just 15 percent. In summary, electronics was consistently represented as a key segment of Canada's online market throughout both years.

The pie charts depict online sales for Canadian retailers in 2005 and 2010. Overall, electronic appliances and food were the most commonly purchased items online during both years. In 2005, electronic appliances were the top-selling product, accounting for 35 percent of online sales, followed by home furnishings at 22%. Food and beverages represented 22% of the total online market, whilst video games made up the smallest share at 18 percent. However, the trend shifted by 2010. Although electronic goods still made up a significant portion of sales at 30%, they were no longer the top-selling category. Food and beverages took the lead, comprising a percentage of 32% of total sales. Video games moved into third place, accounting for 23% of online purchases, while home furnishings dropped to the lowest position, representing just 15 percent. In summary, electronics was consistently represented as a key segment of Canada's online market throughout both years.
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The pie charts depict online
sales
 for Canadian retailers in 2005 and 2010.
Overall
, electronic appliances and food were the most commonly purchased items online during both years. In 2005, electronic appliances were the top-selling product, accounting for 35
percent
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per cent
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 of online
sales
, followed by home furnishings at 22%. Food and beverages represented 22% of the total online market, whilst video games made up the smallest share at 18
percent
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per cent
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.
However
, the trend shifted by 2010.
Although
 electronic goods still made up a significant portion of
sales
 at 30%, they were no longer the top-selling category. Food and beverages took the lead, comprising a percentage of 32% of total
sales
. Video games moved into third place, accounting for 23% of online purchases,
while
 home furnishings dropped to the lowest position, representing just 15
percent
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per cent
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. In summary, electronics was consistently represented as a key segment of Canada's online market throughout both years.
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