The table chart illustrates the number employees and manufactures in both England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. Overall, the numbers of employees were dwindling whilst factories' numbers stayed roughly the same over the fifty-year period. Looking in closer detail to the table, it can be highlighted that the number of employees in 1851 was worth 477 100 for a total of 225 factories with a majority of males. A decade later, the number of factories jumped slightly to 227 with a noticeable decrease of employes, mainly composed by females, who represented 160 000 workers versus 131780 male workers. In 1871, the number of manufacturing facilities lifted overwhelmingly up, to nearly 3 times higher, with a steady decline for the employees’ number. However, men are this time more represented in the workers. This trend will continue until 1891, when the number of factories moved down from 721 in 1881 to 625 one decade later. With less workers and more males than females, the quantity of factories arrived to a point of 600 factories in 1901, involving a bottom of 61 000, concerning the total employee number. To conclude, we can say with confidence that throughout the second part of the 19st century, the number of factories increased with a significant decrease in the number of workers, no matter they are males or females.

The table chart illustrates the number employees and manufactures in both England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. 

Overall, the numbers of employees were dwindling whilst factories' numbers stayed roughly the same over the fifty-year period.

Looking in closer detail to the table, it can be highlighted that the number of employees in 1851 was worth 477 100 for a total of 225 factories with a majority of males. A decade later, the number of factories jumped slightly to 227 with a noticeable decrease of employes, mainly composed by females, who represented 160 000 workers versus 131780 male workers. In 1871, the number of manufacturing facilities lifted overwhelmingly up, to nearly 3 times higher, with a steady decline for the employees’ number. However, men are this time more represented in the workers. This trend will continue until 1891, when the number of factories moved down from 721 in 1881 to 625 one decade later. With less workers and more males than females, the quantity of factories arrived to a point of 600 factories in 1901, involving a bottom of 61 000, concerning the total employee number. 

To conclude, we can say with confidence that throughout the second part of  the 19st century, the number of factories increased with a significant decrease in the number of workers, no matter they are males or females.
The table chart illustrates the
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and
manufactures
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in both England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.
Overall
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numbers
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of employees were dwindling whilst
factories
' numbers stayed roughly the same over the fifty-year period. Looking in closer detail
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the table, it can be highlighted that the
number
of employees in 1851 was worth 477 100 for a total of 225
factories
with a majority of males. A decade later, the
number
of
factories
jumped slightly to 227 with a noticeable decrease
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employes
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, mainly composed
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females, who represented 160 000
workers
versus 131780 male
workers
. In 1871, the
number
of manufacturing facilities lifted overwhelmingly up, to nearly 3 times higher, with a steady decline
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the employees’
number
.
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, men are
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workers
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when the
number
of
factories
moved down from 721 in 1881 to 625 one decade later. With
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workers
and more males than females, the
quantity
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of
factories
arrived to a point of 600
factories
in 1901, involving a bottom of 61 000, concerning the total employee
number
.
To conclude
, we can say with confidence that throughout the second part of the
19st
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century, the
number
of
factories
increased with a significant decrease in the
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workers
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males or females.
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