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The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.

The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.
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In the
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 presented bar chart
compare
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compares
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 data about the percentage of males and females consuming five or more
of
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apply
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fruit
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fruits
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 and vegetables
on
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in
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 a day in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom during 2006.
overall
,
it is clear that
vast
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 majority of both
genger
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genders
 were at
age
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the age
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 between 55 to 64, and the teenagers had the lowest amount.
Also
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seem
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 that the proportion of
men
 and
women
 was the same at
age
 75.
According to
bar
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a bar
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 chart, between
age
 35 to 54 for
men
were
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 roughly the same around 23%, in comparison with
women
 at
age
 35 to 44 was 25% and from
age
 45 to 54 it increased around 32%.
Besides
,
at
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in
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youth
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the youth
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 period from 25 to 34 for
male
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males
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 was 20% and for
female
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females
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 was 22%. It can be seen that between 55 and 65 both
gender
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genders
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 had the highest amount of
averger
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averager
average
 by
age
 group on both
side
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sides
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, for
men
 was around 32% and for
women
 34.5%. The second highest value was at
age
 65 to 74, for
men
 nearly 27% and
women
 29.5%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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