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Most employers do job interviews before offering a position to a person. Do you think this is the best way to do it, or are there better alternatives? What is the best method of choosing employees in your opinion?

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In the competitive
job
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 market existing in today's
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world,
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 there are many options for the people searching for a
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 to choose from. The option
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chosen
 by the people depends on the qualifications they have and their likes and dislikes. Employers who recruit employees to their companies have to select the best matching persons for the
position
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 they are offering, in order to gain the maximum advantages for the company. The
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 used
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 for selecting employers for a
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position
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 is the
interview
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method
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. The
interview
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method
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 which applies
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 selecting employees for a
job
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position
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 has many advantages when considering today's competitive
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 market. When considering the time of an
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, the interviewee is under a certain stress level no matter how better he has
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 for the
interview
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. The ability to work under stress is an important aspect to have for any employee in any
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 category
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 high competition in
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 markets.
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hand
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interviews
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 are practical which can measure how practical the person is. Because today's jobs seem to be more practical than in the past years.
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interviews
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 are a
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 of measuring the interpersonal skills of the person being interviewed. Because
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interpersonal skills are very important for keeping a
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higher
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 in every
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 field, it is important when selecting a person
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 a certain
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 in a company. There can be some alternatives for
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the selection
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 of employers to companies like
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application forms, aptitude tests, group tasks, presentations and role-playing tasks.
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 the advantages of
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 overlay the other alternative methods. Some suggestions for improving the quality of an
interview
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 are by making them more practical.
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a
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summation, the best
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 for
selection
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the selection
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 of people for positions in companies can still be properly held
interviews
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Enhance the logical flow of your ideas by ensuring each paragraph clearly relates to the main argument. You can improve the connections between ideas, especially in transitions between paragraphs.
task achievement
Consider adding more specific examples to support your points, particularly regarding the advantages of interviews compared to other methods. This will enhance the persuasiveness of your argument.
language accuracy
Ensure that you use accurate terminology, for instance, changing 'choosen' to 'chosen'. This will help maintain professionalism in your writing.
content
The essay presents a clear opinion on the effectiveness of the interview method in employee selection.
content
You provided a variety of selection methods aside from interviews, which shows critical thinking and awareness of the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job interview
  • candidates
  • employers
  • communication skills
  • confidence
  • cultural fit
  • application materials
  • subjective
  • bias
  • skills assessments
  • practical tests
  • work trials
  • panel interviews
  • collective evaluation
  • technology
  • video interviews
  • AI-based screening
  • soft skills
  • reference checks
  • balanced approach
  • qualifications
  • character
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