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The chart below shows the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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unnamed university, who can communicate in other
languages
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 in
years
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the years
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 2000 and 2010.
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, Spanish talkers represent the biggest group in
the
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both years. Meanwhile, in 2010
student
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students
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 who do not speak other
languages
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 and who speak German and French were the smallest segment.
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, in 2000 people who can speak
Germany
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 and who speak 2
languages
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 or more made up the smallest part of the chart. Spanish speakers have risen from 30% to 35% in 20 years, standing as the most spoken language in the two periods. Students who learn other
language
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languages
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has
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have
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 increased
with
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from
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 5% to
become
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15% in 2010.
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, speakers of several
languages
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 have climbed to 15%. In comparison, the figures
of
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for
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 native speakers who only speak English have dropped to 10%, after making up
fifth
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a fifth
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 of the chart in 2000. French learners have
also
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fall
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 to 10%.
However
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, the german remained stable in the duration

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words languages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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