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The charts below show the comparison of time spent, in minutes per day, by UK males and females on household and leisure activities in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the comparison of time spent, in minutes per day, by UK males and females on household and leisure activities in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts
shows
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a
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key information
of
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 the comparison of time spent, in minutes per day, by UK males and females on household and leisure activities in 2008. The units are measured by numbers.
Overall
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.the chart
show
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shows
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the
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that
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men
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 are more likely to spend more time on
tv
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TV
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and
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apply
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radio, and video, more
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then
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than
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women
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buy
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by
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slight
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a slight
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diffrence
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difference
, the books
shows
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show
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 that
women
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are spend
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 one more minute than
men
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 ,
at
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the sports and exercises we see that
men
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 spend more minutes than
women
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 by 4 minuts long.
According to
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 what
shown
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is shown
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,
at
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in
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 housework and activities, we notice
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a slightly
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slightly
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slight
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 decline
at
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in
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the mens
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mens
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men
 section in house work and activities, for
exemple
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example
 in cooking and washing the
women
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 shows
incline
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an incline
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of
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in
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 the minutes they spent on cooking and washing more
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then
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than
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men
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 . In conclusion, there are four
of
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apply
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types
on
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of
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 household and leisure
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activities
activites
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activities
 that
men
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spent
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spend
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 time more
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then
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than
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women
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 ,
while
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women
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spent
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spend
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 on 4
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types
typs
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times
like
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as like
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man
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a man
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also
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 , so
it
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its
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 event between the two genders

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparison
  • Household activities
  • Leisure activities
  • Average
  • Significantly more/less
  • Markedly more/less
  • Striking difference
  • Counterparts
  • Societal norms
  • Differing interests
  • Dedicated time
  • Household tasks
  • Maintenance
  • Repairs
  • Pursuits
  • Socializing
  • Gender divide
  • Traditional roles
  • Allocation of time
  • Reflects
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