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The charts below show the comparison of time spent, in minutes per day, by UK males and females on household and leisure activities in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the comparison of time spent, in minutes per day, by UK males and females on household and leisure activities in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts
shows
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 the comparison of
time
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 spent, in
minutes
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 per day, by UK males and females on household and leisure
activities
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 in 2008.
overall
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, we see
men
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got
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spend
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 a higher number than
women
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 of the
time
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 they spend watching TV and listening to the radio or watching
video
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. in the books section, we see that the
women
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 spent more
time
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on
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reading books
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then
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than
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men
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. the final thing in leisure
activities
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 we see that
men
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 spend more
time
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then
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than
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women
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 at sports exercises. in housework
activities
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 we see
women
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 spend more
time
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then
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than
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men
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in
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cooking and washing about 80
minutes
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 per day,
also
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 they
spent
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spend
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 more
time
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in
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shopping
higher
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apply
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than
men
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 .
while
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men
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 spend nearly 20
minutes
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 per day on repairing things the
women
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 only spend nearly 15
minutes
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 . as we come to the final thing in housework
activities
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 wish is clothing washing and ironing that the
women
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 spend more
time
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 the spent on more
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then
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men
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the seventh paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the eighth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, minutes, activities, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "comparison" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the eighth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparison
  • Household activities
  • Leisure activities
  • Average
  • Significantly more/less
  • Markedly more/less
  • Striking difference
  • Counterparts
  • Societal norms
  • Differing interests
  • Dedicated time
  • Household tasks
  • Maintenance
  • Repairs
  • Pursuits
  • Socializing
  • Gender divide
  • Traditional roles
  • Allocation of time
  • Reflects
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