> “You are planning to spend a weekend at a hotel with your family. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter: Explain when you want to come and how long you will stay Ask about activities and places of interest nearby **Ask about facilities and services at the hotel”**

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Dear Sir, My name is Larry Smith. The reason why I am writing
this
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letter to you is that asking
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information like activities and services in your
hotel
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in detail. I am going on
two
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days
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two-day
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trip to Italy with my family to visit my brother. My brother
are
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living at the Bringo
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dormitory. We are going to
come
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Italy on June 12 and planning to spend a weekend at your
hotel
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. I received some information about your
hotel
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from your former guest, Tom Black. He told me that
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inn provides the best services and facilities. I really interested
places
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in places
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nearby
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near
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the lodging. That's why, I want to ask you a few questions. Are there
sightseeings
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sightseeing
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for our family close to your
hotel
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?
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, gardens, museums, malls,
beach
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and other resorts. We will travel around the
hotel
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in addition
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to visiting my
borother
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brother
.
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, what amenities are available at your
hotel
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? If there
are
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a children
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children
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children's
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playground, gym, swimming pool and restaurant inside the
hotel
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,
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meet
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my demands 100%.
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, I kindly request that your lodging supply special services
such
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as cleaning service, car parking, Wi-fi and at least 3 meals a day.
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, the
hotel
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reception delivers fresh towels every day. I would appreciate it
,
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if you provide me with some information about your
hotel
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. I am looking forward to your response. Yours truly, Larry Smith.

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task achievement
Ensure that the opening sentence clearly states the purpose of your letter. Instead of 'the reason why I am writing this letter to you is that asking information', consider saying 'I am writing to inquire about' which is clearer and grammatically correct.
coherence and cohesion
Use proper subject-verb agreement. For example, 'My brother are living' should be 'My brother is living'. This will improve the grammatical accuracy of your writing.
coherence and cohesion
Try to structure your points in a more organized way. For instance, separate your paragraph on activities and places of interest from your questions about hotel facilities, ensuring each paragraph focuses on a single idea.
task achievement
You have a clear intention of asking about activities and amenities, which shows a good understanding of the task requirements.
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Your letter maintains a polite tone throughout, which is appropriate for a formal letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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