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The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.

The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.
the
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ilustrate
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illustrates
 the number of males and females in the UK by
age
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 group in 2006 who eat more than five vegetables and fruit
Over all
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Overall
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, from
age
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 19 to
age
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of
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apply
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75, both females and males have
consuming
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consumed
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lot
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a lot
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 of healthy
deches
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dishes
with time.
female
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Females
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connected
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connection
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 with groups
comparing
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compared
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 to males . axis
title
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titles
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 are more present in older
female
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females
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.
with
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With
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 getting older , people
prefare
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prefer
 to eat
more
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apply
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healthier to have
smooth
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a smooth
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 lifestyle.
With looking to
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Looking at
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the deteils
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deteils
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details
,
age
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 19-24 is
the
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apply
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lower
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then
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than
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other
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others
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, which can be harmful.
Onthe
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On the
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hands
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hand
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,
age
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 55-64
show
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shows
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 saw
dramaticly
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dramatic
grow
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growth
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 by
using
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consuming
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 more
often
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apply
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fruit and vegetables. With time ,
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age
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the age
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65
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groups 65
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-74 and 75 went down with time of period
which
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, which
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 rapidly
decrease
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decreased
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10
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by 10
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 %, considering the biggest
reduse
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reduction
have
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has
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ever
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ever been
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • age group
  • male
  • female
  • health recommendations
  • dietary habits
  • public health
  • trends
  • significance
  • observations
  • gap
  • intake
  • balanced diet
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