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Writing Samples
Band 5

Write a letter to a company asking for a refund for something you bought from them online. Write a letter to the Customer Service department. In your letter: •Describe the item you bought •Outline what the problem is •Explain why you want a refund You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir, I AM WRITING
THIS
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 LETTER TO GET MY REFUND FOR THE ITEM THAT I BOUGHT ONLINE FROM YOUR COMPANY
LAST
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 MONTH
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last
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 month. I bought
a
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2 sets of scrub suits for myself . When
i
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I
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 bought those, it was mentioned in
detailed
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the detailed
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 section
about
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 the stuff of the brand is cotton , and
also
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 in the description chart , the
length
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 of the merchandise is written that the bottom
length
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 is 40cm for medium size and the top
length
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 is 22cm .But when I received it and tried that product on me, it was too small for me. After that, I measured the
length
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 it was only 38cm for the bottom
which
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 is too small for me . Second thing , the stuff was polyester
not
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, not
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 cotton. I am not satisfied with your production at all . I want my refund as soon as possible . Yours sincerely, jas

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Start with a clear introduction to explain what you are writing about.
coherence cohesion
Use more paragraphs, one for each idea, to improve clarity.
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Use a more polite tone in your request for a refund.
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You described the item and the issue clearly.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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