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The bar chart provides an overview of electricity manufacture and utilised utilisation in ten countries in 2014. Overall, the usage and production of electricity increased in nine countries whereas only Germany have decline in the trend. China and the United States were on the top of electricity output and use. To begin with production, the maximum electricity was produced by China, which was 5398 billion kWh and it was followed by the USA at 4000. However, the least energy was generated by Korea, reported at 4851. Interestingly, power generation by the remaining countries ranged between 1000 and 500 billion Kw. In case of consumption, the highest usage was in China with 5322 Kw, while the lowest was in Korea at 449.5 kwh. The usage in Canada, France and Brazil was almost similar around 450 kwh. However, the figures in Germany, India, Japan and Russia remained close to 1000 kwh and above 500 kWh.

The bar chart provides an overview of electricity manufacture and utilised utilisation in ten countries in 2014. Overall, the usage and production of electricity increased in nine countries whereas only Germany have decline in the trend. China and the United States were on the top of electricity output and use. To begin with production, the maximum electricity was produced by China, which was 5398 billion kWh and it was followed by the USA at 4000. However, the least energy was generated by Korea, reported at 4851. Interestingly, power generation by the remaining countries ranged between 1000 and 500 billion Kw. In case of consumption, the highest usage was in China with 5322 Kw, while the lowest was in Korea at 449.5 kwh. The usage in Canada, France and Brazil was almost similar around 450 kwh. However, the figures in Germany, India, Japan and Russia remained close to 1000 kwh and above 500 kWh.
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The bar chart provides an overview of
electricity
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 manufacture and utilised utilisation in ten countries in 2014.
Overall
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, the usage and production of
electricity
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 increased in nine countries
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 only Germany
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decline
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 in the trend. China and the United States were on the top of
electricity
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 output and use.
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 with production, the maximum
electricity
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 was produced by China, which was 5398 billion
kWh
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 and it was followed by the USA at 4000.
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, the least energy was generated by Korea, reported at 4851. Interestingly, power generation by the remaining countries ranged between 1000 and 500 billion Kw. In
case
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 of consumption, the highest usage was in China with 5322
Kw
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kW
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 the lowest was in Korea at 449.5
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kwh
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kWh
. The usage in Canada, France and Brazil was almost similar around 450
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kwh
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kWh
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, the figures in Germany, India, Japan and Russia remained close to 1000
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kwh
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kWh
 and above 500
kWh
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