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The pie charts compare the proportion of water consumption for industry, agriculture, and domestic purpose in six separate regions of the world. Overall, it is clear that water used for agriculture accounts for the largest proportion, except for North America and Europe, mainly providing for industrial use. With regard to agricultural use, Central Asia is the area that uses the greatest level of water, at exactly 88%, followed by the figure for Africa and South East Asia, at 84% and 81% respectively. South America needs a smaller rate, with 71%, compared to one-third of the total consumption in Europe. In contrast, Europe area primarily uses water for industry, making up the highest percentage among the remaining regions, over a half of the total. Likewise, 48% of water is prioritized this purpose in North America, contrasting to 10% of that in South America. A noticeable pattern is that all six areas use an inconsiderable percentage of water for domestic purpose, apart from South America, with 19%, being the most significant consumption level.

The pie charts compare the proportion of water consumption for industry, agriculture, and domestic purpose in six separate regions of the world. Overall, it is clear that water used for agriculture accounts for the largest proportion, except for North America and Europe, mainly providing for industrial use. With regard to agricultural use, Central Asia is the area that uses the greatest level of water, at exactly 88%, followed by the figure for Africa and South East Asia, at 84% and 81% respectively. South America needs a smaller rate, with 71%, compared to one-third of the total consumption in Europe. In contrast, Europe area primarily uses water for industry, making up the highest percentage among the remaining regions, over a half of the total. Likewise, 48% of water is prioritized this purpose in North America, contrasting to 10% of that in South America. A noticeable pattern is that all six areas use an inconsiderable percentage of water for domestic purpose, apart from South America, with 19%, being the most significant consumption level.
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The pie charts compare the proportion of
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 consumption for industry, agriculture, and domestic purposes in six separate regions of the world.
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it is clear that
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 used for agriculture accounts for the largest proportion, except for North
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 and Europe, mainly providing for industrial
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. With regard to agricultural
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, Central Asia is the area that uses the greatest level of
water
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, at exactly 88%, followed by the figure for Africa and South East Asia, at 84% and 81% respectively. South
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 needs a smaller rate, with 71%, compared to one-third of the total consumption in Europe.
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highest percentage among the remaining regions, over half of the total.
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 for domestic purposes, apart from South
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, with 19%, being the most significant consumption level.
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