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The pie charts compare the proportion of water consumption for industry, agriculture, and domestic purpose in six separate regions of the world. Overall, it is clear that water used for agriculture accounts for the largest proportion, except for North America and Europe, mainly providing for industrial use. With regard to agricultural use, Central Asia is the area that uses the greatest level of water, at exactly 88%, followed by the figure for Africa and South East Asia, at 84% and 81% respectively. South America needs a smaller rate, with 71%, compared to one-third of the total consumption in Europe. In contrast, Europe area primarily uses water for industry, making up the highest percentage among the remaining regions, over a half of the total. Likewise, 48% of water is prioritized this purpose in North America, contrasting to 10% of that in South America. A noticeable pattern is that all six areas use an inconsiderable percentage of water for domestic purpose, apart from South America, with 19%, being the most significant consumption level.

The pie charts compare the proportion of water consumption for industry, agriculture, and domestic purpose in six separate regions of the world. Overall, it is clear that water used for agriculture accounts for the largest proportion, except for North America and Europe, mainly providing for industrial use. With regard to agricultural use, Central Asia is the area that uses the greatest level of water, at exactly 88%, followed by the figure for Africa and South East Asia, at 84% and 81% respectively. South America needs a smaller rate, with 71%, compared to one-third of the total consumption in Europe. In contrast, Europe area primarily uses water for industry, making up the highest percentage among the remaining regions, over a half of the total. Likewise, 48% of water is prioritized this purpose in North America, contrasting to 10% of that in South America. A noticeable pattern is that all six areas use an inconsiderable percentage of water for domestic purpose, apart from South America, with 19%, being the most significant consumption level.
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The pie charts compare the proportion of
water
 consumption for industry, agriculture, and domestic purposes in six separate regions of the world.
Overall
,
it is clear that
water
 used for agriculture accounts for the largest proportion, except for North
America
 and Europe, mainly providing for industrial
use
. With regard to agricultural
use
, Central Asia is the area that uses the greatest level of
water
, at exactly 88%, followed by the figure for Africa and South East Asia, at 84% and 81% respectively. South
America
 needs a smaller rate, with 71%, compared to one-third of the total consumption in Europe.
In contrast
, Europeans primarily
use
water
 for industry, making up the
the
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highest percentage among the remaining regions, over half of the total.
Likewise
, 48% of
water
 is prioritized for
this
 purpose in North
America
, contrasting to 10% of that in South
America
. A noticeable pattern is that all Six areas
use
 an inconsiderable percentage of
water
 for domestic purposes, apart from South
America
, with 19%, being the most significant consumption level.
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