The given bar chat provides the UK university’s students of both gender studying rates in six art associated disciplines. In five of the six subjects, females outnumbered males. It can be clearly seen that females made up a particularly large proportion of the student group in linguistics, philosophy, English language and literature, history and archeology, communication and media studies. It is obvious that gender graph especially great in philosophy, where there were two times as many female students as male. As it presented male and female students were more equally represented in English language and literature, art and design, communication and media studies. In English language and literature, there were nearly as many girls (250) as males (approximately 230). This was also true of communication and media studies. Art and design was the only study in which male surpassed female (roughly 175 males vs. 160 females). It may be concluded from the graph that female students dominated almost all disciplines; however, males have a significant presence in subject related to art and design.

The given bar chat provides the UK university’s students of both gender studying rates in six art associated disciplines. 

In five of the six subjects, females outnumbered males. It can be clearly seen that females made up a particularly large proportion of the student group in linguistics, philosophy, English language and literature, history and archeology, communication and media studies. It is obvious that gender graph especially great in philosophy, where there were two times as many female students as male.

As it presented male and female students were more equally represented in  English language and literature, art and design, communication and media studies. In English language and literature, there were nearly as many girls (250) as males (approximately 230). This was also true of communication and media studies. Art and design was the only study in which male surpassed female (roughly 175 males vs. 160 females).

It may be concluded from the graph that female students dominated almost all disciplines; however, males have a significant presence in subject related to art and design.
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provides the UK university’s
students
of both
gender
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studying rates in six
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disciplines. In five of the six subjects, females outnumbered
males
. It can be clearly seen that females made up a particularly large proportion of the student group in linguistics, philosophy, English language and literature, history and
archeology
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, communication and media studies. It is obvious that
gender
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graph
especially
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great in philosophy, where there were two times as many female
students
as male. As it presented male and female
students
were more equally represented in English language and literature,
art
and design, communication and media studies. In English language and literature, there were nearly as many girls (250) as
males
(approximately 230).
This
was
also
true of communication and media studies.
Art
and design was the only study in which
male
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surpassed
female
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females
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(roughly 175
males
vs. 160 females). It may be concluded from the graph that female
students
dominated almost all disciplines;
however
,
males
have a significant presence in
subject
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related to
art
and design.
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