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The table provides information about several ways that UK unemployment spent their time last year. Overall, it is evident that housework, shopping and job hunting were the most popular activities in both men and women. By contrast, they spend less time drinking and doing nothing. In regard to men who activated in the morning, they spent 22% of their time seeking for a job. Similarly, the figures of housework and shopping were 19% and 20% for each, meanwhile the other categories' data were 14% and lower. Furthermore, morning women spent nearly half of the day doing house chores and about about 6 hours a day going shopping. However, the other groups ranged from 1% to 16%. In terms of afternoon men, watching TV accounts for 14% of their time, while the data of staying in bed is merel 1%. Moreover, others varied from 3% to 13%. It can be seen that one fifth of afternoon women's time was spent for housework and they did not stay in bed and played sport at all. On the one hand, other activities changed from 2% to 17%.

The table provides information about several ways that UK unemployment spent their time last year. Overall, it is evident that housework, shopping and job hunting were the most popular activities in both men and women. By contrast, they spend less time drinking and doing nothing. In regard to men who activated in the morning, they spent 22% of their time seeking for a job. Similarly, the figures of housework and shopping were 19% and 20% for each, meanwhile the other categories' data were 14% and lower. Furthermore, morning women spent nearly half of the day doing house chores and about about 6 hours a day going shopping. However, the other groups ranged from 1% to 16%. In terms of afternoon men, watching TV accounts for 14% of their time, while the data of staying in bed is merel 1%. Moreover, others varied from 3% to 13%. It can be seen that one fifth of afternoon women's time was spent for housework and they did not stay in bed and played sport at all. On the one hand, other activities changed from 2% to 17%.
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The table provides information about several ways that
UK
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unemployment
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 spent their
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last
 year.
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, it is evident that housework, shopping and job hunting were the most popular activities
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 both men and women.
By contrast
, they spend less
time
 drinking and doing nothing. In regard to men who activated in the morning, they spent 22% of their
time
 seeking
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a job.
Similarly
, the figures
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 housework and shopping were 19% and 20% for each,
meanwhile
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 the other categories' data were 14% and lower.
Furthermore
, morning women spent nearly half of the day doing house chores and about
about
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6 hours a day going shopping.
However
, the other groups ranged from 1% to 16%. In terms of afternoon men, watching TV accounts for 14% of their
time
,
while
 the data
of
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 staying in bed is
merel
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merely
 1%.
Moreover
, others varied from 3% to 13%. It can be seen that
one fifth
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 of afternoon women's
time
 was spent
for
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 housework and they did not stay in bed and played
sport
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sports
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 at all. On the one hand, other activities changed from 2% to 17%.
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