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IELTS Writing Samples Band 4.5

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In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The reason why crime is increasing in many countries is because some of people have their own needs, but they can't afford their needs because they have no money. So, they start to doing crimes in order to get the money instanly. Another reason, many of people don't want to work hard, they are lazy and want to achieve something big with minimum effort. I think this kind of character makes them think about something that can give them instant result such as robbing, stealing, or maybe being a hitman. But not every person have that characters, some people want to work but there are no job that accept them. Or maybe in some country, their labour rate is below the inflation rate so they still can't fulfill their needs eventhough they have an income. As an examples, in Indonesia we have labour rate around IDR 3.800.000 (for Bandung Area) in a month, but in comparison labour rate in another country such as Australia is around AUD 800 in a week. If we do convertion to IDR, labour rate in ...

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“Nowadays children are undisciplined because their parents are busy with their career.” To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What could parents do to build a sense of discipline among children?

As we have entered another new form of economic crisis under the current political-economy condition, the financial burden for working-class family is greater than ever. For those who have kids, this burden doubles, if not triples. Often times, this issue immediately translates to the increase of working hour the parents take in order to get a bigger take-home pay. Even when it's done for the advancement of their respective careers is no great matter, as the ultimate goal is in the end about the material gains such progress bring to the table.

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In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?

It is undeniable that nowadays people are experiencing a last longer life, comparing to the past. While some people believe that facing this phenomenon turns out various problems for governments, other argue that having more the older brings advantages to society. This essay will examined both views in the following paragraphs before the conclusion is reached.

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In some countries, online shopping is replacing shopping in stores. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is obvious that as information technology growing really fast, more and more custumers choose online shopping instead of shopping in stores. That can cause a lot of questions. But it is true that online shopping cannot replacing shopping in stores, and so that the replacing process is a negative development.

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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

It is significant for children to teach them what is right and wrong since their early age. Punitive measures are mandatory to assist them determine this difference. Although there is an idea which is supporting the punishment the children, I firmly believe, that the negative results of punishing cannot be ignored.

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Although there is a lot of translation software available, learning a language is still advantageous. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that encroaching on a noble language despite of the appearance of various translator applicants is important, which derives a lot of benefits for people who learn it. From my perspective, I partially agree with the former notion and will elaborate on it in the following paragraphs.

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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Purchasing items, for example, books, air tickets, and groceries online is becoming common in society. Although, it may lack of delivery on time, I believe, it brings more positive impacts on people's lives because of convenience and variety types of certain product.

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There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays.

Music has always been a part of people’s lives, and it has been a crucial aspect for society and has evolved to a variety of genres and styles. However, most of them listen to modern music and start to forget the traditional one. Hence, in this essay, I will discuss the reason why music is needed in human lives and presenting my opinion and regarding the importance of traditional music compared to international music.

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Many people believe that reducing speed limits is the best option for road safety improvement. Do you think there are other measures that could be put in place? What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? 20:35

Nowadays, due to the high risk of road accidents, many people are concerned about road safety and possible options of its further improvement. Indeed, some individuals believe that reducing speed limit would considerably adjust the situation, while others would disagree and promote additional ways of relevant problem-solving.

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A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercise and avoid stresses. What should people do to stay healthy in your country? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience?

HEALTHY LIFE CAN BE DEFINED AS BOTH MENTAL AND PHYSICAL WELLBEING.THEREFORE PEOPLE SHOULD PAY ATTENTION TO IMPROVE THEIR BODY FITNESS AS WELL AS THE MENTAL HEALTH.

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Topic: In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas and towards urban areas. Why do you think that is? What problems can this cause?

Many people believe that alive in the city more comfortable than in village. The main reasons why they are moving from rural to urban is job. This essay will discuss about some causes this problem.

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Some people think robots are very important to humans' future development while others think they are dangerous and have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion

It is argued wheither robots will have postive or negative empact on us , and how it contributes to our society , in this essay there will be a disscusion in both advantages and disadvantges for humans coexictence with robots.

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Some people think robots are very important to humans' future development while others think they are dangerous and have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Nowadays, technology is evolving extremely fast, and robots are equipment that have been developing. In addition, some people believe robots will be really crucial devices, but other groups of people have negative thinks so that ,they believe these tools are really dangerous and have a lot of drawbacks. In my opinion, the second theory is the best thing because when the robots and Al do our work, then we cannot handle it.

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The popularity of electric vehicles is rising. Explore the benefits and drawbacks of widespread electric vehicle adoption and discuss potential challenges in transitioning from traditional to electric transportation.

Nowadays, more and more people are switching from traditional transportation to electric vehicles. This issue is believed to bring some positive and negative effects and some challenges can appear in the transition process, which I will explain here.

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Most companies use interviews as the primary method to elect a candidate for a job some people think that this is not the best way Do you agree or disagree ?

The vast majority of corporates choose interviews as the primary method to hire a candidate for a job position. However, not all people agree with that and they think there is a better way for selection process. Personally, I agree with the second argument because the better way to selecting a candidate is through assessment test.

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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

While some people believe that our problems of environmental system nowadays, is diying out some of plants and animals, others think that this problem have bigger resons. I believe rather group because of warming the Ozon and poluutions are clear deal of these problems.

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Write a paragraph about a job you would like to do in the future.

Well, to be honest, I am living the dream to become a business manager. The reasons why I choose this job for several purposes.

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Putting criminals into prisons is not an effective way to deal with them. Instead, education and job training should be offered. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is clear that being criminals into prison is not the best way to understand their mistakes. Some people claim that the government should provide places for education as well as job training to learn a lot of skills for finding good career. I will explain this idea and give my own opinion in further paragraphs also.

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Topic: The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?

The damaging of natural environment effects from escalate production of consumer product. There are some causes those of exploration wood in the forest and building industry of mine in the areas to support the economy of the country.

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It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages? Taking risks became significant for individual's lives, for their proffessional lives as well as their personal lives.

Nowdays, the circumtance of life is very fast and beside that people makes different decisions. According to this situation, sometimes people need to take vital decision that is very risk, but some of that risky decision might have advantages along it is disadvantages.

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